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The Sands of the Lost. Chapter 4-1 | Oct 15th 2009, 02:07pm | |
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I was inspired to create this fan fic this summer while spending the long hours at work thinking of a concept. I abandoned the idea for a few months, then was inspired to start the project up again after reading the fan fics of quality writers here at the Armory. This is what I came up with.
The Sands of the Lost  Prologue: Fade to Black Life it seems will fade away, drifting further every day. ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- New blood joins the earth, and quickly the man is subdued. His hands are bound and his eyes covered. He is forced into a large tent in the middle of the camp. "So where is it?" asks a cold voice. There is no response. "WHERE IS IT!" screams the voice in a chilling blast. Silence. "So be it." The man is roughly removed from the tent. His eyes are uncovered. The night is illuminated by a clear sky filled with stars and a full moon. He feels cold steel press against his back. The steel flashes in the moonlight. The man is left lying in the sand. He gazes up to the sky, and then his vision fades to black. ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- It's a little short I know :p I'm almost done with the first chapter and will probably post in in the next 2-3 days. It is not based on starcraft. anyone's thoughts? |
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| Oct 15th 2009, 02:16pm | |
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Yeah this is a pretty good fan fiction! I've thoght about writing one but decided on the whole not to...
Even if this is a short clip, it is well written and it looks like you took more time on it than most people do on their whole pagers! P.S. Seriously, those ultralisks are only POed run now! ;)  special thanks to battlemedic for this sig! |
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| Oct 15th 2009, 02:16pm | |
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Looks good and I can't wait to see the rest. By the way God job final getting an avatar :D. Moon did not give you any trouble ;) (Just kidding Moon you know I do it in good fun).
P.S. Have you seen the next part of my story yet?  |
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| Oct 15th 2009, 02:20pm | |
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thanks Omega, Cerebrate. I spent roughly 2 days on that part alone. I'll try to get more up in the near future, I have a rough draft of the first chapter, but I need to go back and proofread/edit some here and there.
on the avatar: thanks again Omega, I think Gear manually added them to the store and Tears ran out of minerals lol and btw: those ultralisks are good as gone, cerebrate :p |
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| Oct 15th 2009, 02:25pm | |
Hey pal! You know how long it took me to make those !@#$%^ Ultralisks!!! If I would have known you were going to blow them up, I would have made some cheap old lings! I'll get you later... Anyway yes that is a nice fan fiction and I look forward to future excerpts! special thanks to battlemedic for this sig! |
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| Oct 16th 2009, 05:39am | |
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As Silent has said. "I'll pretend that I wasn't a beta reader on this." lol
I can't wait to see your completed next chapter. Overall, it is very well written. Keep writing, you'll enjoy the literary power. No, I mean it. You will enjoy the power. :)
Read my Trilogy. Book Two: Crimson Deeds.
______________________ Crazy, I don't think so. Funny, sometimes. Serious, yes, yes I am. I am the Master of Collaborative Writing. |
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| Oct 16th 2009, 05:55am | |
as Uberlisk once said in an opium induced, power hungry shriek: This is MY universe! (jk about the opium part :p) Thanks for the support! edit: got to get Silent to start reading this! |
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| Oct 16th 2009, 07:08am | |
Yes the power is nice. You are after all god of your world where any thing you want happens:). Just remember do not try to mess with other peoples worlds or they might just put you in the story to have you die a horrible death(You already seen a taste as to what I can do;) ). So any time on when we will see the next part? |
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| Oct 16th 2009, 11:32am | |
It is short, but in this little preview you gave an exciting prologue. What is the story behind this? Is that guy a member of the secret society caught by the members of another one in Sahara, or a scientist which discovered a way to use sand as a fuel source? The endless possibilities make this interesting. We will only find out by reading further. [BTW, I am working on my fanfic too, but it is very slow due to other stuff I have to do. I think I am at 2/3 of a new chapter currently. Will post it when I finish it, hopefully in a few days.]  |
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| Oct 16th 2009, 12:37pm | |
Hey Strajder! i'm glad your reading :) you are kind of on the right track with the story, it'll be revealed in due time :p p.s. I look forward to your new fan fic! btw: how do I edit the thread name? Like when some fan fic writers change theirs to (name of fan fic)-chapter 3 posted, for example |
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| Oct 16th 2009, 01:11pm | |
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To change the name just edit the first post.
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| Oct 16th 2009, 01:16pm | |
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wow! looking good there! nice prologue! im looking foward for chapter 1!!!!
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| Oct 16th 2009, 01:51pm | |
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Thanks, Omega ;) Here's the first part of chapter 1
Chapter 1: Undamaged Destiny ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- James climbed the wooden ladder to the top of the watch tower. He wiped sleep from his eyes with a gloved hand. Nodding to the soldier he was replacing, he strode to the edge of the railing. Gazing out, he could just barely make out the far side of the Menvas river. A sea of trees was all that could be discerned from the eastern shore. This dark mass of vegetation was known only as "The Old Forest". It had long been a favorite hideout of bandits and highwaymen. "Which is why I'm up here at 5 in the morning," grumbled James. A brilliant sunrise reflected off of the river's clear surface. On the west side of the river was Ganton, James' hometown. The village sustained itself through fishing and shipping due to its location. Unfortunately, the forest bandits found trade boats to be tempting targets. James' job was to watch for strangers and bandits that may have intent to "relieve" the boats of their burdens. James was a soldier in the local militia. His father had left (rumors circulated that he had gone east to study the Cataclysm), when he was only seven and never returned. His mother lost hope that her husband would return, and she passed away four years later. To support himself, James had found work, mostly hard physical labor, at the docks. When he had come of age, James jumped at the opportunity to find a new career path for himself. There were a few towns beyond the Old Forest. Then, there was a mountain. Nobody from Ganton knew what lay further east than that. Since the Cataclysm, nearly two hundred years ago, the towns and cities of Arevas had become very isolated. A Dark Age had descended upon Arevas. Only in the last century had Ganton re-established trade with a few towns further downriver. ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- by the way, did anyone notice the metallica references in the prologue? |
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| Oct 16th 2009, 04:07pm | |
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No problem. Looks good so far and by the way I like the pic in the prologue. I was going to do the same thing for mine, but could not find a pic that I was was happy with.
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| Oct 17th 2009, 10:12am | |
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Kewl. LOL @ Cataclysm, though. ;-D
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